Need quelqu'un super à l'aise en anglais pleaaase !

*MAJ* Le texte ci dessous est un autre texte qu'il faudrait m'aider à corriger svp

"Mr. Judge, gentlemen, ladies of the jury, good morning. Today we are trying Mrs. Yukiko Watanabe who is accused, after an investigation, of exploiting Uighur labor in an inhumane manner in her black and pink salt extraction sites in the Himalayan region. Sites which, I remind you, would be a facade to hide the massive extraction of lithium, an element which is part of the composition of nuclear weapons among other things. I also remind you that Ms. Watanabe is very close to the Mao Zedong regime, probably because of her Chinese origins and that the latter financed this gigantic charade. In an era of nuclear arms race, allow us to doubt the intentions of Ms. Watanabe and China."

To insure => to ensure
Fulfilment => fullfilment (si t'écris en anglais US)

Be you proud of you because you can be do what we want to do.

Ça fait pas du tout naturel change pour des verbe plus simple

Par example :she succombed, j aurais plutot ecris tout simplement : she died due to illness

this is cool bro !

peace out

Merci ! Et du coup à part ça tout est bon ?

Même si c'est dans le cadre d'un procès ? Parce que l'idée est d'avoir un vocabulaire un peu soutenu de ce fait

Oui je pense ne te perd pas dans une farandolles de mot compliqué tu fois exprimer des chose simple et pas faire une dissertation

She was adopted by a wealthy Japanese client — Shinichi Watanabe — who decided to take her with him to Japan.

"She was adopted by a rich Japanese client"

J'aurais plutôt mis "by a wealthy Japanese client"

Ok ok j'ai appliqué la majorité des corrections et voilà ce que ça donne:

"The defense wishes to remind the jurors of Yukiko Watanabe's journey. She was born in China without a father because her mother was probably raped during the Nanjing massacre during the Second World War. Her mother decided to leave Nanjing for the capital. But she was unable to create a new life there, and became homeless. She died due to an illness, leaving her daughter an orphan. Ms. Watanabe grew up on the streets and became a prostitute as a teenager to ensure her survival. She was adopted by a wealthy Japanese client - Shinichi Watanabe - who decided to take her with him to Japan. He died in 1956 and Yukiko Watanabe took over his business. A woman who, despite life's challenges, has adeptly seized the opportunities essential for her fulfilment. I'm not seeking sympathy from you, esteemed members of the jury. Instead, I'm underlining that a woman who has overcome such hurdles couldn't possibly harbor ill intentions."

Ma correction mais c'est les formulations qui gênent plus que l'orthographe.

"The defense wishes to remind the jurors of Yukiko Watanabe's journey. She's was born fatherless in China without a father because her mother was probably raped during the Nanjing massacre during the Second World War.
Her mother decided to leave Nanjing for the capital, but she was unable to create a new life there, and became homeless.

She succumbed to an illness, leaving her daughter an orphan. Ms. Watanabe grew up on the streets and as a teenager became a prostitute as a teenager to insure ensure her survival.

Then she was adopted by a rich Japanese client, Shinichi Watanabe who decided to take brought her with him to Japan. He died in 1956 and Yukiko Watanabe took over his business.
A woman who, despite life's challenges, has adeptly seized the opportunities essential for her fulfilment fullfilment.

I'm not seeking sympathy from you, esteemed members of the jury. Instead, I'm underlining that a woman who has overcome such hurdles couldn't possibly harbor ill intentions."

Without laughing i could

The gorilla will be done for !

*Drop the mic*
Bravo mec, ça me semble parfait

Et à part ça le plaidoyer est clairement pour avoir de la sympathie. Elle est sensé avoir fait quoi?

Pour moi c'est bon.... en tout cas tout est limpide et compréhensible.

Juste un petit détail....Tu écris:

"She was born in China without a father because her mother was probably raped during the Nanjing massacre during the Second World War."

J'aurai essayé d'éviter la double utilisation de "during" dans la même phrase.

"She was born in China without a father because her mother was probably raped during the Nanjing massacre that happened in the middle of the Second World War."

Le "without a father" est pas très joli non plus.
J'aurai remplacé par fatherless.

Aider le régime chinois à avoir l'arme nucléaire en les fournissant en lithium en exploitant des ouighours dans les montagnes de l'himalaya.

Oui pareil, la répétition me gênait. Merci pour l'alternative !

Proposition de ChatGPT pour un ton plus pro

The defense would like to direct the attention of the jurors to the life story of Yukiko Watanabe. Born in China under challenging circumstances, her journey began without a father due to her mother likely being a victim of the Nanjing massacre during World War II. Following her mother's relocation to the capital, they faced further hardships, eventually leading to her mother's passing, leaving Yukiko orphaned. Growing up on the streets, she resorted to prostitution as a means of survival during her teenage years.

However, her life took a turn when she was adopted by a wealthy Japanese client, Shinichi Watanabe, who brought her to Japan. Following his passing in 1956, Yukiko assumed control of his business, showcasing her resilience and ability to seize opportunities despite adversities.

I'm not appealing for sympathy, esteemed members of the jury. Rather, I aim to highlight that a woman who has triumphed over such trials couldn't possibly harbor malicious intentions.

Et voilà la version finale !

“The defense wishes to remind the jurors of Yukiko Watanabe's journey. She’s born fatherless in China because her mother was probably raped during the Nanjing massacre that happened in the middle of the Second World War.
Her mother decided to leave Nanjing for the capital, but she was unable to create a new life there, and became homeless.

She died due to an illness, leaving her daughter an orphan. Ms. Watanabe grew up on the streets and as a teenager became a prostitute to ensure her survival.
Then she was adopted by a wealthy Japanese client - Shinichi Watanabe - who brought her to Japan. He died in 1956 and Yukiko Watanabe took over his business.
A woman who, despite life's challenges, has adeptly seized the opportunities essential for her fullfilment.
I'm not seeking sympathy from you, esteemed members of the jury. Instead, I'm underlining that a woman who has overcome such hurdles couldn't possibly harbor ill intentions”