Need quelqu'un à l'aise en anglais 2

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Le texte à corriger:

"Mr. Judge, gentlemen, ladies of the jury, good morning. Today we are trying Mrs. Yukiko Watanabe who is accused, after an investigation, of exploiting Uighur labor in an inhumane manner in her black and pink salt extraction sites in the Himalayan region.
Sites which, I remind you, would be a facade to hide the massive extraction of lithium, an element which is part of the composition of nuclear weapons among other things.
I also remind you that Ms. Watanabe is very close to the Mao Zedong regime, probably because of her Chinese origins and that the latter financed this gigantic charade.
In an era of nuclear arms race, allow us to doubt the intentions of Ms. Watanabe and China."

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Voici les erreurs dans le texte original :

1. "Mrs. Yukiko Watanabe" devrait être "Ms. Yukiko Watanabe" pour être cohérent avec l'utilisation de "Ms." plus tard dans le texte.
2. "Sites which, I remind you, would be a facade" devrait être "Sites which, I remind you, are alleged to be a facade" pour exprimer l'accusation.
3. "to hide the massive extraction of lithium, an element which is part of the composition of nuclear weapons among other things" peut être simplifié à "to hide the massive extraction of lithium, an element used in the composition of nuclear weapons, among other things".
4. "Ms. Watanabe is very close to the Mao Zedong regime, probably because of her Chinese origins" devrait être "Ms. Watanabe is closely associated with the Mao Zedong regime, likely due to her Chinese origins".
5. "and that the latter financed this gigantic charade" devrait être "and that the regime financed this colossal charade".
6. "In an era of nuclear arms race, allow us to doubt the intentions of Ms. Watanabe and China" peut être reformulé pour plus de clarté en "In an era of nuclear arms race, we must question the intentions of Ms. Watanabe and China".

Voici le texte corrigé :

"Mr. Judge, gentlemen, ladies of the jury, good morning. Today, we are trying Ms. Yukiko Watanabe, who is accused, after an investigation, of exploiting Uighur labor in an inhumane manner at her black and pink salt extraction sites in the Himalayan region. These sites, I remind you, are alleged to be a facade to hide the massive extraction of lithium, an element used in the composition of nuclear weapons, among other things. I also remind you that Ms. Watanabe is closely associated with the Mao Zedong regime, likely due to her Chinese origins, and that the regime financed this colossal charade. In an era of nuclear arms race, we must question the intentions of Ms. Watanabe and China."

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